An Unwelcome Visitor

Cherry

By luigi_pagano

Tue, 27 Apr 2021
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7 comments
 

 

Our village had a burglar
who was a scallywag.
During his nightly raids
he never hit a snag.
 
Said he was a gentleman
which was rather quaint
as he was an old lag
and not at all “The Saint”.
 
If he ever saw an opening
to steal someone's treasure
he didn't feel any guilt
but a perverse pleasure.
 
The rascal thought it was
entirely the victim's fault
for being careless enough
and not locking the vault.
 
Assets were not secure;
there was a gaping hole
which enabled the plunderer
to relish what he stole.
 
The inhabitants got wise
and finally closed the gap
thus stopping the activity
of the disreputable chap.
 
 
© Luigi Pagano 2021
Certificate U
Poem
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Crime

Comments

Submitted by Mark Burrow on

Kind of felt sorry for the burglar! 

Think your apostrophe on victims' needs shifting left due to the definite article. 

V enjoyable 

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Grateful for your feedback regarding the apostrophe, Mark. I find its use very confusing. I may have been mistaken in assuming that the apostrophe should be at the end because the noun 'victims' was plural. 
I meant to say that it was the fault of the victims, etc., etc. but  I take your point and shall shift the abhorrent apostrophe.

Best, Luigi

My thanks to the editors for the cherries.

 

Submitted by marandina on

A disreputable chap indeed, Luigi!

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

An inveterate wrongdoer, Paul devil

Cheers, Luigi.

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

What does he do with the loot Liuigi? Maybe he Is a gentleman, a modern Robin Hood!

Tom

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Let's give him the benefit  of the doubt, Tom, and hope he does some good with his ill-gotten gains

Cheers, Luigi.

 

Submitted by Kris on

I had to read this twice with a smile. I had former school mate that turned out be a burglar. From what I heard, a really good one at that. I ran into him once at an airport bar some years ago before his last arrest. He thought and said exactly as you describe it "entirely the victims fault". And for him it was like a professional sport, he really enjoyed the thrill. Your captured and eloquintly wrote what I heard and saw..... Well done Luigi