Handle With Care

Gold cherry

By mcscraic

Mon, 24 Jul 2017
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Handle With Care -
by Paul McCann
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On the fringe , on the street ,

trying to get back on your feet .

On a binge , on your todd ,

you call out ; for the love of God .

On the stinge , on the tap ,

for some spare change to go and shop .

On the lend , can't depend 

on making both ends meet these days .

On the mend , my old friend ,

I'm trying hard to change my ways .

On this end , right side up .

Handle me with care , as it says .

Certificate 15
Poem
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Comments

Submitted by airyfairy on

Wonderful rhythm, conveying the careless hustle and bustle we are all surrounded by, and then those last two lines, with their heartfelt plea.  I wondered about more of a gap between the first six lines and the second group, as the rhyming scheme, and therefore the rhythm, changes here?  Just a thought.  I enjoyed it a lot.

Submitted by mcscraic on

That's awesome that you see that as well and yes 

I do agree with what you say .

 I did consider a change afterwards but thought again 

it is as it is .

thank you for the wonderful input and understanding .

 

Submitted by airyfairy on

A really attention grabbing poem, with its straightforward plea for a bit of humanity.  This is our Facebook and Twitter Pick of the Day!  Please share/retweet if you've enjoyed it too.

Picture credit:  http://tinyurl.com/y7gen6m7

Submitted by mcscraic on

I feel overwhelmed by the appreciation of this poem

and it's something I'm not used to .

thank you so much .

The added photo looks great 

 

Submitted by Ewan on

... in parvo. Very, very good. My virtual hat is doffed.

Best

Ewan

Author Page at the 'Zon
 

Submitted by mcscraic on

For the things you said , I think you're great .

your comments I do appreciate .

 

Submitted by lenchenelf on

controlled, and really like the allusion to  cardboard bedding and mattress with

"..On this end , right side up .

Handle me with care , as it says "

Good stuff Paul xx

 

 

Submitted by mcscraic on