Moments Remembered (A Haiku)
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By Natalia
Wed, 05 Sep 2012
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11 comments
Pain whispers to me
It leaves me hanging, halfway
I wish I was dead
Moments are entombed
Death, every moment closer
Nights- so much longer
Professions of love
Now without any meaning
They were alive- once
Everything is bare
Where the flowers used to bloom
Is nothing; a void
Someday when I'm old
I will look upon these days
And smile at these words
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you have taken the
you have taken the discipline and made every syllable count. This works really well. Best thing I've read of yours yet.
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Yep agree with Sooz on this,
Yep agree with Sooz on this, great poem, well done on the cherry.
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By far the best I've ever
By far the best I've ever read of yours, and a tricky format, too. Very well deserved cherries!
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Congrats on your first
Permalink Submitted by Jessiibear on
Congrats on your first cherry, Natalia! Must feel nice; a real virtual pat on the back. I really liked this one. The flow was fantastic. :)
Jess
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Hello Natalia. I like this
Hello Natalia. I like this as the others do. Well done. Big smile from me.
8-)
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Very nice, Natalie. A poem
Permalink Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on
Very nice, Natalie. A poem of overcoming, as doing a pushup---tough at first, with perseverance--- perfection. Ah, the joy of stepping outside yourself. Keep writing, Richard LP
Richard L. Provencher
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