Shutter the Wind

By Richard L. Provencher

Thu, 20 Sep 2012
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The wind arrives in gutsy
action---leaves cowering under the
threat of an announcing storm

weatherman says so. And I linger
in my stare at sky’s warning squint
clouds roiling
mumbling my way
as I hasten to shutter windows

a big one on the way. Last
week 85 mm in twelve hours--
took a good look at the parched
land and soaked it through to China.

Now I am aware of the power
in Nature’s might
with stares of delight at my
weakening light. I am more than

a little nervous. My tomatoes
won’t stand the pace of frenzied
droplets upon the vine
and I surrender to
unrelenting wind and rain.

© Richard L. Provencher

Certificate U
Poem
POETRY - A Passage of Motion 3
Nature

Comments

Submitted by steve_elliott04 on
Altogether a very well written and enjoyable piece. I think the poem really comes to the fore in the least to stanzas, building with momentum and a force that, in a way, mimics the subject. I particularly love S4. The rhyme of 'might', 'delight' and 'light', with the rhythm a enjambment into S5, really tighten the poem up and fine tune the delivery of you intentions. One thing that threw me off course a little is the use of 'flicking' in S5. It doesn't seem to carry the power of the approaching storm, and doesn't justify your being 'more than a little nervous.' Other than that single point, a very very fine write! Admirable. Cheers, Steve.

Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on
Steve, your overview is splendid and I thank you for it. I really looked this over and agree my "flicking" droplets was weak. Do you think "overlapping" creates that culmination of the approaching storm? Cheers, Richard.
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Submitted by Sooz006 on
Nature that you've captured perfectly, Richard.

 

Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on
Thank you, Sooz... Guess I can't seem to get away from Nature writing, eh? I love it. Richard
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Submitted by Indrani Ananda on
Indrani Ananda You've captured the apprehension felt before a storm well here, Richard. Especially after weathermen have said it might be bad, and precious plants are at stake. How about "frenzied" droplets? Indrani

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Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on
Thank you, Indrani, for your kind comments. And yes, 'frenzied' is also a good fit. I'll leave it sit in my poem for a spell and digest it. Thanks and Cheers and all the best in your own writing. Richard
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Submitted by jolono on
Liked this Rich, natures power is awesome and you've captured it brilliantly.

 

Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on
Thank you beyond words, jolono. Keep your feathers dry. Rich
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