the way I leave

By Yutka

Sat, 05 Jan 2019
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The way I leave I’ll do it secretly

without a tear that binds me to the flesh, 

without a scream, that binds me to the mind

but like the ghosts, that come and go unheard

with memories floating quietly undeterred

between the many different rivers of belief.

 

I’ll slip along, a dream that has been dreamt,

a careless brush of air, a butterfly

you see and then it’s gone, a speck of light

that winds its rainbow prism across a face.

And when you cry, I leave a hint of lace

with my last shadows just to hide your grief.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Submitted by Stephen Thom on

'A speck of light that winds its rainbow prism across a face' is beautiful. Pretty words, images and a sadness - and at times acceptance and indifference in this - at least I felt so. Unsure about the tense changes but perhaps they added to the ethereal quality, a sense of projection/different times. Much enjoyed

 

Submitted by Yutka on

Thank you Stephen. It's interesting you mention the tense change. Would you have any suggestion for change?

 

 

Submitted by rosaliekempthorne on

This was graceful, sad, tranquil and seductive.  Words used effectively to express a lot of feeling.

Also, the art work's great.  Yours?

Submitted by Yutka on

Thank you Rosalie for you kind words

The picture was me aged16, sometimes ago winkand yes, I am a digital artist.

 

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Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

There's a haunting beauty within this poem that I found so fragile. Very much enjoyed reading.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Yutka on

Thank you Jenny, for enjoying a whimsical poem...there is beauty in everything, you just need the right eyes for it...

 

Submitted by Nolan on

Excellent Scharlie! The contrast between the first and second stanzas, how it was done, brilliant. And I would agree also that the picture is too. I can't imagine how it could be done. Beautiful.

Nolan &