Waves of Eternity

By Highhat

Wed, 05 Jan 2011
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15 comments
 

Mournful bees swarm
flooded riverbeds.

Shout hooray for tangled
starlight on snowy surfaces.

Gusts of wind
bring sheets of rain,
driving incoherently
on stringy eucalyptus bark,
printed and dashing.

Squirm, sizzled sobriety.

Games of leafy trespass,
mountain furrow,
rock bridges
gushing water beneath.

Swirls.

Singed violin bows crescendo
snaking tones on a rainbow horizon.

Sun beating down from the sky
to clean air
with apocalyptic harshness.

I stare at blades of grass in
whiplashed eternity.
The Pacific Ocean's waves.

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Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Pia, what beautiful, expressive words you use here, just love the lines: Gusts of wind bring sheets of rain, driving incoherently on stringy eucalyptus bark, printed and dashing. But actually I love all the lines as a whole. Thanks for a great read. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Thank you very much Jenny- so glad you enjoyed this poem. ;)Pia

Submitted by shoe on
Very evocative and vibrantly descriptive, it positively zings! I especially like the last two stanzas,

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Shoe- thank you very much for your comment. I am glad you enjoyed ;)Pia

Submitted by Kahdai on
Wow Pia there is so much of this is amazing! :) K x

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by JoseHdz on
great job.. fun read. jose.

Submitted by Highhat on
Glad you enjoyed Kahdai and Jose. Thank you ;)Pia

Submitted by fatboy74 on
I very much enjoyed this Pia - some pretty startling imagery and i love they way you put it all across disjointed - which I think ties in with your purpose. :-)

 

Submitted by Highhat on
You are quite right Fatboy- It is meant to be disjointed as you pointed out. Thank you. ;)Pia

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Highat Lovely descriptive poem words melt away.like landscape view. Like it all,lines; Singed violin bows crescendo snaking tones on a rainbow horizon. julie x

Submitted by Highhat on
Thank you very much Julie- nice of you to comment ;)Pia

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
I missed this one earlier, pia...I'm sorry;-) Glad I've read it now though. You use effective imagery throughout and it is rich in wonderfully descriptive vocabulary. More than well done! Tina;-)

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Thank you very much Tina- glad you liked the vocabulary. Thank you for reading and your kind comment ;)Pia

Submitted by well-wisher on
I agree with all above. I like the first two lines best; almost haiku like. I'm not sure if this is a straight nature poem or a symbolic poem. The "Waves Of Eternity" seem like quite unpleasant waves and you seem very hot in the poem, longing for "tangled starlight on snowy surfaces". Is this a straight nature poem; a travel poem about a real pacific island you've been to or is it a symbolic poem? You also mention "Sizzled sobriety". Is it a poem about sobriety? I also like the last verse; I stare at blades of grass in whiplashed eternity. The Pacific Ocean's waves. "Whiplashed eternity" conjurs up images of hell and I also like the idea of a poem which ends with thoughts about eternity; the poem ends but the waves continue. It's a good poem, full of lovely description, but, like I say, I'm not sure if I understand it all.

Oh look, a link. I wonder where it leads.

JoHn

Submitted by Highhat on
Hi Well-wisher. Thank you for asking questions. I'll try to answer. mainly it is a poem about the forces of nature- eternity is forever and so are the waves in a lifetime they are just forever. I grew up in Australia- hence the eucalyptus bark and Pacific Ocean and the great forces of nature as we see them at the moment in the floods in Queensland. Nature can be so merciless, n'est pas? It is also about sobriety- linked with my life ;) Hope that answers some things for you? Otherwise just ask again. Thank you for going into such depth with it. That was the idea- of it being a bit deep. cheers ;)Pia