A sick mind

By Highhat

Sat, 09 Apr 2011
  • 1408 reads
20 comments
 

I’d like to be different
But I can’t
Because I live in a straight- jacket
Preventing me from displaying
Who I want to be
I have a very fine idea
of how I wish to live my life
But I can’t
You say then shelve it
But I can’t
That would be dangerous
There are some joys
Though they are tuned at
A low level
there is a limit to tolerance
To all opportunities
To brainpower
To sanity
To my physical expression
To my social capacities
There are so many limits
Not many green lights
Only red.
I’d like to be the somebody I often
Wish I was
But I can’t
someone slammed on the brakes
they're jammed

Certificate U
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on
Hey, this is really neat. A journey out of control, with a sudden halting at the end, and relief. Richard LP
Richard L. Provencher

Submitted by Highhat on
I'm glad you felt relieved Richard. Way to go ;)Pia

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Many will identify with your poem, Pia, and the feelings which the narrator touches upon. The imagery of the journey works very effectively. Tina;-)

 

Submitted by seashore on
Yes, I understand this - well put, Pia.

Submitted by Beeme on
I can relate too, very much. A great message very well expressed :) x

k.

Submitted by Highhat on
I'm thinking of taking this off as I think it is a bit too confessional but then you all seem to be able to relate to it so I must have hit a general feeling. Maybe I should let it be? thank you very much for commenting I'm a bit down today. Maybe it will be better tomorrow or later ;)Pia

Submitted by seashore on
Please don't take it off, Pia - also have a down day so am thankful for something I can relate to! Coral x

Submitted by Highhat on
okay I won't Coral thanks for getting back to me I'll try to think of something cheerful to write about atb ;)Pia

Submitted by insertponceyfre... on
I don't think you should take it down either Pia -it's a good poem. I hope you feel better tomorrow

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks you very much Insert. Also for the good wishes. ;)Pia

Submitted by seashore on
I wouldn't worry about finding something cheerful to write abot either Pia - write what you feel. I't's all about quality and this is a very good poem as Insert says. Coral x

Submitted by Highhat on
You are too kind Coral- you can't always change your mood by writing but just finding the words gives immense satisfaction equalled the comments you get on a piece here. ;)Pia

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Pia, I feel exactly the same way Tina does about your poem, you have touched upon feelings that are very human in all of us. So I agree don't take it off and I really hope the sun is shining for you better today. Take care of yourself. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks Jenny ;) times can be rough but you light up the day for me with your comment ;)Pia

Submitted by ScoZen on
Hej little Highhat. "...Not many green lights Only red..." Don't forget...there are colours in-between? godnat.
ScoZen

Submitted by Highhat on
Tak ScoZen- 1000 tusind Tak sov godt ;)Pia

Submitted by beaste on
I love the ending, it changes the whole poem. In a good way

Bea :-)

Submitted by Highhat on
So glad you read this one of mine Beaste- thank you for your kind comment ;)Pia

Submitted by seekerofwords on
the journey your words took me on were of great benefit! I really enjoyed this fine piece of writing! Namaste, Lenny

easy on the mayo dude!

Submitted by Highhat on
I'm so glad you enjoyed Lenny- thanks for telling me ;)Pia