Dream Cord
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By london_calling79
Tue, 29 Nov 2011
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Same themes but different dreams.
Some skin connection brings
two fields of the same green feeling.
The bed a bible
and the sheets a hymn.
Another fibre brushes.
Transmits and receives
echoed by a breath.
Original in synch.
Core to pore, baptising sweat
a dream cord crackles between.
Along the self same stream
of the guilty edged theme but a different dream.
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The bed a bible and the
The bed a bible
and the sheets a hymn...
Core to core, baptising sweat...
I rather like those lines.
PS You don't need to start each new line with a capital letter, only those for new sentences.
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I liked this - it reads well
I liked this - it reads well - you don't need to rhyme - let yourself be free to say whatever you want without boundaries - you have some lovely images
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I really like the rhyme - it
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I really like the rhyme - it makes the whole poem flow and doesn't sound forced. Some brilliant imagery in this compact little poem!
Magic xxx
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I agree with all the above!
I agree with all the above! Could have been longer as it was so good. Yes drop the capital letters- brilliant imagery..
;)Pia
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I think some word programmes
I think some word programmes put them there automatically, very annoying, well earned cherry.
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I always used to write with
I always used to write with capitals at the beginning of each line because many of the poets (like Heaney and Hughes) I used to read so much used them. really like this - agree with magic about the rhyme although I can't really do it myself and enjoyed your brilliant word acrobatics. Well done on cherry. :-)
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