A Reply To A Submission

By luigi_pagano

Sat, 09 Nov 2013
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13 comments
 

I could not face the 3-way 'Equivoque' once again so here is a simple version based on the same technique.
By reading the odd lines only we get the opposite meaning to the one suggested by the whole poem.

Dear Sir, today we got
your novel and we don’t think it is
an unsolicited manuscript,
on the contrary we welcome it a lot.

We can see right away
if someone sends us something
that it is a lot of rubbish
but yours has made our day.

We must make it clear:
if we find any chaff,
we have reason to bin it.
Yet, you needn’t fear.

I am sure that you’ll be
a long lasting author and not
a five-minute wonder
as many are, believe me.

Our unbiased advice
to those who have no talent 
is to give it all up
and we never tell lies.

© Luigi Pagano 2013

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Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Cleverly written; you must have had to keep your mind sharply on the job to produce this! and keeping up the rhythm and rhyme scheme. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

I had some prior practice, Rhiannon, so it wasn't too bad.

Thanks for your prompt comment.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Luigi,  I understand this one a lot better.  I think it's so clever and take my hat off to you for coming up with the idea.  Jenny.  xx

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

I am so glad that this piece is less complicated and more understandable, Jenny. I am all for clarity in poetry.

Luigi xx

 

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

Yes, Luigi this is a good one! Why is our language capable of equivogues? Why have they been around for centuries? They appeal to my sense of excitable wonder when things fly in all directions and also make sense. (Wild rock music does this for me too and also songs where there is a driving rhythm on guitar and hard-hitting lyrics)          Elsie

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Difficult to know why a language can be equivocal; perhaps it is because it has evolved over time and has assimilated many idioms. I magine a foreigner like me coming across an expression like 'It's raining cats and dogs' and wondering what it all means. But anyway, it is good in my opinion that we can manipulate the lingo in so many ways and thus achieve poetry that can stir the soul just like the music does to you.

Luigi.

 

 

Submitted by prettyrose on

smileyHi Luigi, I hope your well.

 

Like the others I enjoyed this very much, its clear and clever! Your obviously very talented in how you use words and your writing is excellent. Well done.

 

 

 

smiley Keep Smiling

Keep Writing xxx

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Keep Smiling and Keep Writing is part of my philosophy, Prettyrose. I enjoy writing verses and if others can derive some enjoyment from them it is much more rewarding. THanks for your encouraging words.

Luigi

 

 

Submitted by KateReamer on

Ah, another beauty! You have a talent for these. I plan to give the ip a go in the latter part of the week smiley

Kate 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Please do, Kate. With your CV of four stories and three cherried pieces it's bound to be a corker.

Thanks for stopping by and commenting.

Best, Luigi

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Bear, having read my previous one this must have been a softer blow.

When the Muse strikes we have to make the most of it.

Cheers and thanks.

Luigi

 

Submitted by Luke Neima on

Loved this, Luigi. Another creative approach to form - you've got a lot of talent and it's always fun to watch you work your magic with an IP. 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Praise indeed, Luke, I am honoured.

P.S. I mustn'l let my head swell or I'll have to buy a bigger hat!