For Better for Worse...
By Silver Spun Sand
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Simultaneously horrible and
Simultaneously horrible and excellent. It stands out for me because of the simplicity of the language, the complexity of the emotions, and the fact that it's highly credible.
Well done Silver.
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You do pared down and direct
You do pared down and direct just as well as the more elaborate. Brutally ripping.
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Hi Tina
Hi Tina
Very powerful poem. So much said so simply, and all so sad. That old marriage promise comes back to bite. But I don't really think that is what they were thinking of when they said, "for worse".
Jean
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Downright gut archiving. Damn
Downright gut wrenching. Damn good here, Tina.
Rich
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this is one of your best Tina
this is one of your best Tina
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A hard read but a great read
A hard read but a great read Tina. Emotions flowing through the whole thing. Excelent.
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Hi Tina.
Hi Tina.
You managed to get that self-blame thing in there. Others wouldn't understand - might look down on someone who allows themself to remain in such a situation, but it's always more complicated than that, and your poem brought so much of this to mind. For the most part there doesn't seem to be an excuse to get out, or sufficient funds available to afford to do so. It's often a matter of managing the situation and hoping for the best...
Great poem.
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Mmmm. It's a trap, isn't it?
Mmmm. It's a trap, isn't it? Seen it myself. You captured it well here, Tina. The tragedy.
Oddly enough, I found myself on the same theme tonight. Though a parody, in a way, when I read this. Mine is something else wearing the skin of this subject.
Parson Thru
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Well I am obviously a
Well I am obviously a horrible girl because I left two guys when I was in the early stages of pregnancy! That feeling that the good times were mainly over and also they they were both unemployed some of the time and poorly paid the rest so there was not the lure of staying with a 'good provider'. I still think of them and like to remember their good qualities, which I see in my daughters.
Yes a lot of of people still feel love, let's face it, if the man was bad every minute of the day it would be a far easier decision.
Confusion can be a powerful drug, feeling oh so stirred up, exploding physically and emotionally with not knowing what all the wild feelings are. Wuthering Heights- when we truly look at how the b*gger behaves! Elsie
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Delicately put but so
Delicately put but so stunning. I loved this.
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Nice one Tina. Well deserved
Nice one Tina. Well deserved pick of the week! x
Parson Thru
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Visceral. Truthful. Your
Visceral. Truthful. Your writing is so spare, so honest. A few times I have been so affected I just didn't know what to say. A failing in me I fear.
I look forward to reading more. Excellent pick of the week.
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On re-reading the poem, I
On re-reading the poem, I feel that where it bites hardest is in the closing lines.
where I come from
nice girls don't.
The young wife and mother is maybe part of a family and a neighbourhood where if she leaves her husband she is challenging the old ways in a way that many people may not wish to cope with and they may judge her and treat her harshly. She is very much caught between a rock and a hard place. The emphasis on i has bittter power Elsie
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