Black Vinyl



By ralph
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Black Vinyl
And we are now listening through lo-fi.
Tinny of ear, buffeted of bass.
Cup your ears for the middle.
Nothing, not a drone, or revolution.
On the Somerset levels they chorus ‘Death’.
And In Gaza, once it's done, there will be no echoes.
If you stamp on the dead grass of old Europe,
you’ll still hear a faint crackle. A history hiss.
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"history hiss" is great
"history hiss" is great. I was too dense to get your full meaning the first time of reading, so glad I read again. And again. And again. fabulous
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Brilliant poem. This is our
Brilliant poem. This is our Pick of the Day. Do share on social media.
Hope the photo is ok. Let me know and will change it, if not. It's from wikimedia commons so no issue re public domain.
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A hiss story, brilliant !
A hiss story, brilliant ! And you are so right, we humans never learn, making the same mistakes again and again like a cracked record ..
Sorry if I am missing your sublety which everyone else has understood, but is meant to be 'feint' in the final line, not 'faint' ?
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Oh, I liked feint, too, like
Oh, I liked feint, too, like in fencing when it's a pretend attack, not real
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Yes I did read it several
Yes I did read it several times, wondering about the use of 'feint'. I was thinking along the lines of a feint being a subterfuge, like the grass was just pretending to crackle ..
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This is beautiful—masterful
This is beautiful—masterful in its compression and weight.
Every line feels carefully etched, rich with imagery and layered sound. “A history hiss” will stay with me. That quiet crackle of the past still echoing beneath everything—we hear it, even through the distortion. Stunning work.
Jess
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"once its done, there will be
"once its done, there will be no echoes"
should this be "it's done"?
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As others have said, it's
As others have said, it's stunning, on another level. The use of metaphors and the atmosphere.
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