Under A London Sky

Cherry

By jolono

Wed, 14 Jan 2015
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22 comments
 

The tube was packed.

I gave up my seat for that old lady.

You smiled. A proud smile.

We changed at Mile End

for the Central Line.

Still packed. We cuddled.

You smelt of you.

We laughed when the man said

“Mind the gap.” He sounded so posh.

At Holborn we raced up the stairs

hearts pumping. Sunlight. Fresh air.

I held your hand as we

crossed the busy road

You held on tight. Kept holding

all the way to Oxford Street.

We window shopped. No money

to spend. But we dreamed.

In Trafalgar square you screamed

as the pigeons tried to land

on your shoulder. I laughed and

threw more seed. You scowled at me.

For the first time. Ever.

I didn’t throw anymore.

We ate sandwiches in the park,

made in your mums kitchen

and drank some fizzy drink.

We walked down The Mall and

saw soldiers on horseback

You felt sorry for the horses.

All that weight. Must be tired.

I stopped. You turned and I kissed you.

We didn’t get the tube home. We walked.

The day that changed my life.

All this.

Under a London Sky.

 

 

 

 

Certificate U
Poem
Poems of Life and Love
Romance

Comments

Submitted by Bee on

This is so bright and vivid, jolono, I could see it all and feel the emotions. Touched my heart, and weirdly, brought back memories, even though I wasn't there. Also loved the title and the way it rolls off the tongue.

Bee

Submitted by jolono on

Thanks Bee. Think all of us can relate in some way. Especially being Londoners!

 

Submitted by jolono on

Thanks Noo. I don't usually  do lovely. So its a nice change for me!"

 

Submitted by celticman on

mum's kitchen. sounds like a true story, just that way, no pissing on Ronnie Kray?

 

Submitted by jolono on

Mums kitchen was where it all happened. Sit downs, get togethers, fights, we even ate their once! You could piss on Reggie but NEVER Ronnie! Cheers CM.

 

Submitted by Starfish Girl on

The beginnings of a whole life together seems to be packed into such a small space.

Lovely images.

Lindy

Submitted by jolono on

Thank you Lindy, London's a big place but the people in it are so small.... Thanks for the read,

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

So tender, these two seem like the centre of their universe - and London.  

Submitted by scratch on

Lightness. 

Easy to come with you for the trip with its flashes of recollection.  Really liked it.  Congratulations on the pick too jolono.

 

 

Submitted by jolono on

Thank you PS. Young Love. Glad you liked it.

 

Submitted by jolono on

Hi Scratch. First bit of poetry in 2015. Hoping its not the last... Concentrating on Jack Winter now. need to get the damn thing up and running again.

And big thank you to the fruit pickers!

 

Submitted by scratch on

I'd like to see Jack Winter become your second novel jolono. 

The reaction to it on here so far supports that idea and I know that your natural ability to write fantastically well means that this adventure could easily evolve into your next full-blown novel. 

Personally I can't wait.

Pete.

 

Submitted by jolono on

Thanks Pete. It will. Before Christmas I went through the first chapters and ironed out a few bits. Its now at 30,000 words and is about half way. Ive given myself a deadline to finish it and have it out by June. We'll see!

 

Submitted by scratch on

Write it in you own way and in your own time. It's good to set targets but not to become a slave to them.  That said I wanted to have mine ready for review this month and I managed it.  Whether owt happens only time will tell.

 

Submitted by Shannan on

... and so universal.

Wonderful to be able to have a dream for so many be a personal reality. 

What a blessed way to have your life changed forever.

Thanks for sharing $

 

Submitted by jolono on

Thanks Shannan. Its not autobiographical for me. But a lovely thought...Happy New year to you.

 

Submitted by Shannan on

Yes, a very lovely set of thoughts

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

This is very convincingly autobiographical for something that isn't jolono - a beautiful love letter to a person and a city

 

Submitted by jolono on

Thank you Insert. This is me showing my more softer side! Unlike Jack winter... But its not autobiographical. it's close though...

 

Submitted by scratch on

Everything's autobiographical, even the stuff that isn't.

 

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Joe,

this is one of those writings that's timeless. The measure of love between two people in a crowd that only have eyes for eachother.

Great poem and much enjoyed reading.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by RJF on

A beautiful snapshot of a perfect day Jolono, loved this. R