Slipping into the Water

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By D G Moody

Fri, 29 Dec 2023
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He fears she is slipping away,                                       
Slipping into the water.                                             
And though he takes
his stand on dry land,
he cannot hold her there,                       
For she’s slipping away
Into the water.                        
And no matter how he tries 
To hold her there,   
He cannot hold her             
Above the water.                                                           
And he knows                              
That one day 
She’ll slip away,                                   
Until she merges,                      
Becoming one                                   
With the water.

 D G Moody 2023.

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Submitted by D G Moody on

Thanks editors, for the cherry.

Dougie

Dougie Moody

Submitted by airyfairy on

Beautifully put. I have a friend going through this situation now, and know several others who have been through it in the past. The love is beautiful and heartbreaking.

Submitted by D G Moody on

Thank you for sharing your own experience. They came this morning for a coffee, and we saw how she is loosing herself, no matter how he tries to help her. It is the worst, the very worst, and we can only do our best to help. 

Dougie Moody

Submitted by airyfairy on

Thoughtful and heartfelt, this is our Facebook and X Pick of the Day.

Submitted by D G Moody on

Again, my thanks, and it may help to bring this terrible affliction to more notice.

Dougie

Dougie Moody

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Beautiful way to describe what is so frightening

 

Submitted by D G Moody on

Thanks Di - much appreciated

Dougie Moody

Submitted by Turlough on

These are excellent words. I think back to elderly people I have known and your poem describes perfectly how I remember them being gradually taken from family and friends and from life itself. Nothing can stop that slipping.

Good on you!

Turlough

Submitted by D G Moody on

Thanks for you comments Turlough , and yes, it is like watching a slipping away.

Dougie Moody

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

It is a slow bereavement and loss. Usually the persons affected seem happy, though maybe not when it is starting and they are aware of confusion, but it helps if they are seen to be relatively happy. But difficult for those who are friends and family, and long to be able to share still. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by D G Moody on

Thanks Rhiannon. Unfortunately, she is now in a state of depression and anxiety, though the next step may well be her no longer knowing she is - terrible all the same. 

Dougie Moody

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

Such a poignant depiction of a heartbreaking condition. I know someone in this situation and she has passed the terror of the early stages, but it was awful to watch

Thank you for sharing this, and you really deserve those golden cherries, well done

 

Submitted by D G Moody on

You have got it right; my wife has said that the next step will most likely be that way - thanks for reading.

Dougie Moody

Submitted by marandina on

A friend from my writing group's wife is suffering with alzheimers. He had to move out of the house on doctor's orders because of how she gets. Thankfully, after weeks of wrangling, the council have finally agreed to arrange for her to be cared for in a home. It's a truly debilitating disease. You capture it so well with the analogy of slipping under water. Nicely done, Doug.