My Tsunami Girl.

Cherry

By jolono

Wed, 22 Jan 2014
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10 comments
 

She came in waves, and

Like a tsunami, hitting shore,

The devastation was the same.

 

I was bowled over,

Hit by a force I’d never

Felt before. My brain froze.

 

I was drowning in her wake,

Head spinning, I fought for breath,

“Hello” was all I could say.

 

Bang! It hit me again,

Her smile made my eyes sting

And my cheeks burn.

 

She spoke. I shook with fear.

Dirty Harry had his Magnum .44

Hard against my temple.

 

“Hi, what can I get you?”

My mouth dried and my tongue

Began to blow up like a balloon.

 

“Saveloy and chips please.”

 

 

 

 

 

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Comments

Submitted by Bee on

Nice title, great comparisons, sweet romance and charming humour. I just love it.

Bee

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

A well summed up piece Jolono.

Oh! Those embarrassing moments when we see someone we're attracted to and are lost for words.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

very funny Jolono  - I was expecting something completely different when I saw the title!

 

Submitted by jolono on

Thanks Bee, this started out as something quite different,

 

Submitted by jolono on

Hi Ben, sav and chips.... my favourite!

 

Submitted by jolono on

Thanks Jenny. Glad you liked it.

 

Submitted by jolono on

Hi Insert. It was going to be completely different but just kind of morphed into this...

 

Submitted by VeraClark on

My tongue used to grow to epic proportions over a local bar man. By the time I got to ordering, the voice was a distant pipsqueak.

What really tickles me about this, Jolono is that last line. All that adrenalin for a bloody Saveloy. You lead your readers astray shamelessly and that simple chipshop order made me identify with all the above in a heartbeat.

 

Submitted by jolono on

Thanks Ray.

 

Submitted by scratch on

Nothing wrong with a chippy dinner.  Lol.