Anyway
By Louise178
Sun, 05 Jun 2011
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This is a word sum
when I am done
will we understand...
me + you x the world turning round
not letting us stand our ground
me + you with the past
running fast, catching up
= problems mounting x 10
hearts imploding heads exploding
off, in passionate bursts of joy
me + you x 1000 bubbling gasses
explosions breaking windows
a ground breaking formulae
me + you is written on the wall
time winked winds blew
drying dark runny ink
as the sun shone on reflections
of glistening puddles full
of happy times fingers talking
me + you x 1 a perfect sum
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Hi Louise178, I like this,
Permalink Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Louise178,
I like this, it's very original and makes you think.
Thanks for the read.
Jenny.
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I really like this Louise.
Permalink Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
I really like this Louise. Jenny's right - it's very original!
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Original indeed, Louise;-)
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Original indeed, Louise;-) Tina
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Nice poem. I especially like
Nice poem. I especially like the way you stripped everything down to bare, elemental essentials and, of course, the last line was best of all. Running the risk of redundancy, nice poem.
barryj1
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hi Louise :) well done on a
Permalink Submitted by prettyrose on
hi Louise :) well done on a well worded poem :)))
I felt the + were a lot for me and kept me on my toes and out of breath lol But you have a obvious talent.
Keep smiling
Keep Writing :)))
Keep Smiling
Keep Writing xxx
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What a clever piece this is.
What a clever piece this is. I've read it a few times now and enjoy it more each time.
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