Turn of the year ’scape
By Rhiannonw
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Scrawny trees
stark on pale clear sky
tangled twigs and
mistletoe orbs;
jaded damp sodden turf,
wintery stillnes
’til sudden stormy shake
of blasting gale,
dark clouds
and lashing showers …
quiet skies again.
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I like the imagery in this
I like the imagery in this one. Nice and concise... I like it!
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I felt colder reading this!
I felt colder reading this! Very glad to be inside :0)
I liked "scrawny" with "stark",
and "shake" at the end of the line with the added buffets of repeated "a" sounds in "gale" and "lashing".
And then you end with an echo of "scrawny" in "again" it's so clever! So much seemed to have happened in so few words
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Really enjoyed this skillfull
Really enjoyed this skillfull word picture, thank you. It's been positively spring-like here, but yours is more usual for this time of year. Happy New Year!
typo: stillness
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Hello Rhiannon.
Hello Rhiannon.
Your poem is a perfect description of what I see when I walk down the lane to our village.
The words
jaded damp sodden
work so well together to describe the atmosphere at this time of year.
I really enjoyed reading this and I wish you a happy New Year.
Turlough
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You've captured the starkness
You've captured the starkness and beauty of winter in this poem Rhiannon.
A striking example, descriptive of the view from our back bedroom window.
Hope your New Year is Healthy and Happy.
Jenny.
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Beautifully done. Such
Beautifully done. Such precision with your words. Happy New Year to you, Rhiannon. Paul
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I did like the immediacy of
I did like the immediacy of this - the sudden arrival of the storm and then the quiet again. And the 'mistletoe orbs' is such an evocative phrase. You took me right there.
Happy New Year, Rhiannon.
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Hi Rhiannon
Hi Rhiannon
what a lovely poem to the new year. Thank you for your comments on my last post. You are right about the bridesmaids being related to the groom. I will change it when I get my computer wowrking again. I am using my son's at the moment.
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