"Once In A Blue Moon" I.P

Cherry

By Cavalcader

Tue, 16 Mar 2010
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Mandolin She always felt left out as a child
So she grew up a bit wild!
her temper and anger inside

Then she remembered the beat
dancing! dancing!
twirling in her bare feet
treading and stamping

As she learnt when young
to walk on hot coals
By the scorching
Blazing! sun

Mandolin the player she was known
Would bring it out
sit on the slippery rocks
quite near the sea
as it lapped in the yellow foam

She wore a T shirt black with a face on
kind of copied her life upon
Her long black locks
hanging to her shoulders

With the cheeks of white streaks on her face
long blue feathered earrings dangled down
her forehead with a headband round
in the colour of a blue moon

Sea shells around her swan long neck
in the middle was a secret heart
that opened to explore
It was a compass
to help her get from Abc.

Her skirt long and flowing
with pictures of pommegranites and exotic fruits
The flowers of compannula and edelweiss
in clusters to follow the routes

It was getting darker and darker
No birds to hear
but high in the twilight sky
there was the blue moon
as the eclipse shading by

The blastering winds
whistling through the cracks
of the mountains
"Come on" "Come on"!

Volcanic efflux lava and phosphorus gasses
spewed out
As Mandolin climbed
Higher" and higher!

towards the sublime heavens
She found an igloo made of frozen ice
and crept inside
suddenly!

she heard the howling of coyotes
their beautiful coats
shone in blueish tones
she mustn't be scared

so took out her mandolin
as most animals responded to her
And sung a harmonious song
then she peeped out

there were the Coyotes
like her T shirt on
and the mountains far beyond
Mother and father stood proud

Growling
mouths open wide
But the fluffy baby pups
threw back their heads

their mouths and necks
upwards towards the sparkling sky
found the tune like a lullaby
as she played the mandolin

she fell asleep
the coyotes had paced down
until the dawn of daybreak
had crept in she knew they would protect her

Mandolin opened the heart once more
and took a good glance at the photo
her memory straining hard came now
how she was separated at birth

from a big family
it was of her grandma
who had brought her up
She could do all these things

To watch and dance on hot coals
the fires making shapes
and brackens and twigs crackling
with the once in a blue moon shining

And she remembered her nan then
Used to have a crystal ball
Always turn your money over
by a full moon she would say

Black cats are lucky
Never walk under a ladder
Mandolin didn't want to know all that
She just liked music dancing
and stroke the black cat purring.

all comments needed please and ideas maybe.
It's like reading, and seeing things much more vivid and vibrant. and colours,life and nature.
To explain or do poem now.But not good punctuation
and found dictionary now so helpful.x

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Submitted by Nolan on
Strange
 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new hello! Nolan thanks comment.Can you expand the word strange please so I maybe able to give you an answer. thanks. julie x cavalcader (:-

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
yes, but I like quite a lot of the pictures it paints

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Insertponceyfre Hello! thankyou lovely comment. It was complex to do, true half of it.I can't paint but mind and memory seem to be more activated now. Especially with the Editor T.Cook Tony and Abctalers help, but reading most of these when I can to. Let the juices flow Tony would say Like my P-P-P "Pick-Up-A-Penguin" poem done was my coat given to me But it is still made up story or poem try julie x cavalcader (:-

Submitted by tcook on
Julie, I like this very much - it's your best for some time. I'm not sure that you mean 'pyrrhic' - look it up as I'm not sure that that is what you mean to imply. You tell a good story here and you bring out some excellent images. Well done!

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Well done on the cherry, Julie. You are getting quite a collection and none more deserved than this one;-) Tina xx

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
Hello! Tony, Editor of the abctales Thankyou so much for the cherry! and Abctales team. I did send email see if Title IP OK."Once In A Blue Moon" it's a saying to.Hope things go well for you. Yes" Tony sorry you are absolutely right I did mean pyrrhic from dictionary and not pyrrchic great spelling mistake I now have corrected it,thankyou telling me. Unless you have a better word? I did scribble it down first while resting,jumped out bed crossed each stanza out as did it to level it to make sense? I was so excited to see it's worth cherry! 4 weeks of pandemonium and phone ringing etc; going on for me,and course not well there too, the talent night etc;one caused so much stress,someone knew in had. (he) says I must move on.We may go and watch the 3rd heat Saturday if not late finish,by bus. I couldn't do a thing at one time, let alone concentrate imagination.If you read into poem "The Sound of silence,"most mine real life! It seems when I am at my lowest AbcTales doors open.? Half of it is true! and a bit of romany on dad's side his mum my nan so I am a bit psychic or was to. Does it need punctuation.Off to "Abba Gold" daughter's treat so be dancing in the isles and now!! certainly will.Just bought gold braid and lined trousers down side,plus golden music notes, looks good. Poem "Green Eyes" going well owner's permission will read out again soon in something and couple weeks something else, his cat special.But does need punctuation? From last year.Hope cat earn a cherry!for him. And at the talent night the judge liked it, did I do it yes Abctales.But had no mike,stuck in holder to answer back public to hear said. So this now finishes a better good day. Thankyou so much, and to the Abctalers. I am amazed.Really tears in my eyes. Thankyou. Well it's the T shirt and turned it into kind of poem.Thankyou when depressed things gone terribly wrong my work seems better what? and quiet in other room no t.v. on. Do you think last stanzas ok. last minute I added.Shall I cut this down. yours are so interesting stories."Hope In A Strange Corner" great.Deserves the cherry! julie x

Submitted by Cavalcader on
Silver-spun-sand tina, Thankyou so much lovely comment. and the great cherry! four weeks of pandemonium going,on for me. To-night on Abctales Editor T.Cook (tony) Thankyou to all and Abctales team and encouragement from you too. Cherry! As when at my lowest,or things gone terribly wrong,door opens Abctales my work has come up better. Imagination I once had none,or concentration either. I would never check before typing it out hence all mistakes and no punctuation.I am a bit psychic late dad's side, from his mum my Nan. Daughters treat mattinee "Abba Gold" Sunday Mothers day gift Sunday lovely and her friend coming now as he can't dance. So dancing in the isles,celebrate cherry! Now bought two 3ft pieces gold braid put down side trousers and gold music notes sewn,can't sew neat,time I grew up. I just wish he would stand up for me in something.We might go by bus Saturday night watch 3rd heat if not to late finishing.Hope you had a good mothers day,maybe one day will go to the tree! Like you want to you know what I mean.On a sunny day take a cup of tea, sit in a chair,by that special tree? Yes,lovely surprise,especially all goes wrong,scribbled in bed,checked it all and got up put poem on my goodness cherry!After awful 4 weeks. Seems at my lowest the best may come out. Take care julie xx

Submitted by Nolan on
Funny strange, not as in funny haha!
 

Submitted by Tom Brown on
Well done! You had me spell-bound. I couldn’t break loose!
 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
t.Cook Tony Thankyou I have cancelled word pyrrhic. As you kindly say, definition may not be quite right I thought I was being clever with dictionary. Does poem flow better now. thankyou for help. she was getting her anger out. julie x

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Tom Brown Oh! thankyou so much had rough four weeks,couldn't think over something so I rested scribbled jumped out of bed into the other room and put it on Abctales. it's a T-shirt I have,half is true most of it is,more like Apache dance. Now altered a bit 1st stanza.I was amazed after I re;read it which I don't usually do? for correcting it. Thankyou Editor t.Cook Abctales and the cherry! gobsmacked? and all the team. What can I try next?

Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on
Hello Calvacader, This is a great poem, full of zip and snap. I can see in my mind, as I close my eyes, Mandolin twirling a baton under a night sky, bathed in the moon's spotlight, with the animals of the forest mesmerized by the dainty steps and leaping into the night and joining the stars who call to her. God bless, from Richard LP ps. I show where my poems are published to encourage folks to also try those markets. There are many wonderful writers like yourself on ABCTales.com
Richard L. Provencher

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Richard L Prov Hello! Richard I do hope all is well with you. What a magnificent comment The mind takes over now, And Editor t.Cook AbcTales helped on one two wrong words great and thankful,now corrected. It really was a T shirt,with most on then I made most of the rest up.I amazed myself? But I love to read all of yours,you are brilliant. Also another "P-P-P Pick-Up-A-Penguin from coat daughter,gave me.It is a year now on AbcTales. Kheldar David, re-arranged and helped with 2 The Crocodile-Tears" excellent now.And Tony Editor helps me a lot punctuation images ideas (I.P.)now learn't about Track not know how to do, but read great and the forum on here. Look foreward always readinga of yours,always. julie x

Submitted by darkenwolf on
it seems to stumble a bit in the middle but its good; it tells a good story. You should try writing the tale as a short story it would be a good read i think. I like it a lot though; you paint a vivid picture. Try writing it as a short story - i would definitely read it. ;)

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new darkenwolf thank's comemts I do realise that too, but amzed got a cherry! for (IP) was it. Not sure can do story on it yet, it was T shirt I bought, angelic indian face in blue attracted me to it, re religion, as it was folded up, got home and it wasn't lovely indian women feather in hair, and Coyotes on, so I made up all of it. What did you think? At first such bright blue mistook face of Virgin Mary. Until I unfolded it. But I did amaze myelf to what I made it into, under all adversity. All I can say. Never worn it yet? julie

Submitted by darkenwolf on
you made it sound like a native american legend - like a story passed down through the generations ;)

Submitted by Cavalcader on
New darkenwolf Oh! I see but did you like my interpretation. Was T shirt Wolves or Coyoyes on. I was amzed how I did it, when read it back. I usually just type as I go. But much better scribble it out and submit after read it. Isn't. No I won't change it as a marvellous cherry! But you can use or bits as you like. Thankyou help As your title is darkenwolf thought may like see.. julie xx x Cavalcaderl mistake?

Submitted by darkenwolf on
no mistake. i like it a lot thank you for tellling me about it. ;)

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new darkenwolf Oh! gee thanks. The l on Cavalcader is a mistake. ok. May like "The Talking Moon". Like reading your's too. Got to go visiting. toodle-loo for now I am needed. julie xx

Submitted by Nolan on
You must have rewritten all of this Julie it's beautiful. Sometimes I wish we could rewrite our life in this kind of way. Can't. Just as well. Cheers!
 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
New Nolan, Thanks comment, I just try, sometimes it's a mess. No it's mainly parts true of my nan, dad's side. Clever, as a child I go and once saw her with a crystal ball, and the t leaves, in religion, and the bible states, not right power. Bad. Can be. Dancing and stamping thing's I have seen and done, or my dad did, called dobing the sheets in a tim bath in the garden, before washing machines. Just take his sock off pooh1 The mandolin my dear friend now in N/Home could play, and other instruments. Read music I can't. Some of it I made up. Some words looked in dictionary. Then watched volcano erupt, and picture all magnificent colours, It was a T shirt on table, all kinds, folded, but bright blue face caught my eye, thinking Virgin Mary. Got home, unfolded indain lovely face, and blue etc; three coyotes or wolves. But also Oh! thre is slight moon, so title,but it is saying to, forgive sex some heard "Once In A Blue Moon". I don't like Alsations or wolf dogs, two huskies on leads beautiful. But frightned Alsatians go by, one jup4d through window as a child next door to us, also saw little boy paper whop, pillar went for him, course. Now you have spoilt the surprise? of the story. I thought it was poetry when first got on here, but all kind of things, much more interesting, but at first, I couldn't do, or feel right about my life1 Some awful can't put on. Anyway sleep well. More poetry please romance ones, good at. You can write, about your life! I couldn't do a thing, so you can? ok your gifted? and I am wary as some family alive. ok. julie xx

Submitted by Nolan on
You won't believe how much work I put into something. Hours and hours. Endless patience and dedication. Love is it's own reward && Pleased you appreciate it, Nolan
 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
New Nolan Yes, I realise how long some do work. And as you say hours, Practice makes perfect. But most have no one interrupting them. As computer lead is noly ong enough for table, it was shorter. Bang goes idea setting up table, and no extension or mine won't put it in anothe room, away from t.v. and phone calls etc; and racing t.v. Yes it is usually an hour or 3-4 in our different kind groups, we did. But look at the poet, comes out of you so good. Yes, I am absolutely 100$ sure and know hours you put in. Course I appreciate, maby bit jealous, if I can't grasp like author's can do. But interacting all help's. The mind, is a complicated thing. Like a bus stops and starts. Funny, in all situations. Thankyou, both go dogy back so resting. I love to read and use knowledge, images pictutes, photos, walks, comfort. Agony Aunt, help's me in all. T Shrit's life, nature experiences. Author;s poems, what ever subject. Helps me, and titles HOLY, hORSES everything, is a stepping stone from AbcTales and help to me. Nobody once could understasnd my writing? let alone this. I am so lucky! and get faster typing now. Sometimes, I jump the computer, which only recives each key slowly. I typed young, never touch typist. Like shorthand not trianed a few lessons with someone, but could write a ltter in it, put upstairs, in office with trained typist, and shorthand, one mistake of falscap copies say 6 have to do whole, lot again. One learn signs, then shorten it, then lengthen the signs. I could read it back, new outlines, even if not right. One manager drew the horses heead for me in shorthand, laugh I could learn. That's enough from me. Both over stretched back. julie x ramblings. julie xx