Room with a view

By Highhat

Tue, 26 Apr 2011
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13 comments
 

Perspectives
Windows at angles
Doors slamming
Keys jangling
Unlocked birdsong
No wind
Pebbles and dandelions
Suicide safe
Speech is a murmur
Words of strength
Wedged between fading posters and
Affirmation
Looking deep into a pit of dreams
Ants spitting on the lavender
Falling in and out of love

Certificate U
Poem
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
An extremely evocative poem, Pia. The structure you have chosen suits it well. Well written and highly effective...the last three lines particularly, a gem;-) Tina

 

Submitted by beaste on
I like it. Short and simple

Bea :-)

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks a lot Tina- glad you enjoyed- your words mean a lot to me ;)Pia

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks Beaste- very kind of you ;)Pia

Submitted by insertponceyfre... on
I like it too Pia. Quite a lot to read between the lines in this one

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Yea Insert- you are quite right. Thank you for your kind comment ;)Pia

Submitted by Mummy Penguin on
There's an intensity to this work that is increased by its brevity and imagery. Really enjoyed reading it. MP

Submitted by maisie on
"Keys jangling Unlocked birdsong No wind Pebbles and dandelions" my favourite bit... thanks.

maisie angel Guess what?  I'm still alive!

Submitted by Highhat on
gee thanks MP and maisie- so kind of you to read and leave a comment. Glad you enjoyed ;)Pia

Submitted by seashore on
Another fan of this poem adding my bit, Pia. Really liked it.

Submitted by Highhat on
I appreciate exactly you commenting Coral- thank you very much ;)Pia

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
A truely imaginative poem from you Pia. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks Jenn. Nice to have you back ;)Pia