Thrill

Cherry

By Rhiannonw

Mon, 12 Dec 2022
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What a surprise
to rise
to such a sight –
all covered in white.
It looks
like we’ve seen in books.
What funny stuff!
Is it enough
to make a snowman?
Fingers so icy,
cheeks pink,
eyes bright –
help to pick and pile,
and in a while
twigs and stones
for mouth and eyes,
and for a nose …
‘Can we have a carrot,
please?’
“Say ‘cheese’!”

[Inspiration Point:  use Fire, Earth, Water or Air. ] I suddenly thought after writing this, that snow is an interesting form of water!

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Comments

Submitted by marandina on

The thrill of snowfall through the eyes of children. Nicely done, Rhiannon. Yes, we have snow in Northants today too. Paul :) 

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Paul. It was quite a surprise here, but lovely for the childre. Not a lot left, but pretty cold! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Rhiannon,

this is a seasonal poem that children will love. The snow in the garden has definitely made me feel more Christmasy. I love the snowman in the picture too.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

thank you, Jenny. Yes, a nice little snowman for them There was a lovely photo of two beaming little ones either side of it! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

Great, if slightly off piste use of the inspiration point, and a lovely snowman Riannon - thank you!

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you. And sorry, it was a bit mischievous, to add 'Inspiration Point' but it seemed fun to point out it is all about a different form of water we've been suddenly confronted with! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

no need to apologise! I was going to say how a snowman makes winter perfect for a child in my initial comment - then I remembered how for so many children this year especially, it probably means a very cold house and very worried parents

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

True. It's a thrill if a warm house to return to, and if it doesn't last too long. Thoughts and prayers also very much with the Ukrainians. Rh

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you for the cherries on the snow! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

snowman looks as though about to do a twirl :0) I really enjoyed your record of a thrilling day (perfect title!) and you communicated the wonder infectiously, thankyou!

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

smiley Thank you, It is particularly thrilling for children if they have rarely, if ever seen and been in snow, and making a snowman. We haven't much left now. It was unexpected, we don't get much snow here! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by forest_for_ever on

Clever and charming.  Well done!

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, glad you thought so! Rhiannon