Conditions for sleep

Gold cherry

By Parson Thru

Sun, 08 Dec 2019
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16 comments
 

Imagine a stormy sea

Waves on weathered rock

Gulls tumbling

Structural damage likely


 
The window’s been wide open

Bedding piled against the cold

Door fast

Time set aside


 
These are the conditions for sleep

Certificate U
Poem
Miscellaneous

Comments

Submitted by drew_gummerson on

Really lovely. (But I don't think you need the asterisks. Their sharp points distract from the beautifully sharp simplicity.) 

 

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Hi Drew.

The asterisks are a bit of a cheat to resolve a flow problem quickly. They separate the two "worlds" a little, too.

I'll have a look later and see if I can get around them.

Thank you enormously for pointing the problem out. Just what's needed!!!

Parson Thru

Submitted by drew_gummerson on

I'm really no poetry expert. But I think a line space is just fine. 

 

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Me neither! :)

Parson Thru

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Thank you for the cherries!

Parson Thru

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

I just love the wildness of this poem...that feeling of being tucked up in bed on a stormy night, falling asleep to rain beating against window pane and hearing the crashing of waves, with maybe the wind howling outside and whistling through cracks.

Sets the imagination and dreams in motion...well it would mine.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Thanks Jenny.

 

It did mine. :)

Parson Thru

Submitted by rjnewlyn on

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(Parson Thru - the picture has been added for publicity purposes; do feel free to change or delete it as you wish)

 

 

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Thank you!!!!!!!

I remember when this first happened.

I'm still just as amazed and grateful. X

Parson Thru

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Blimey, friends. I'm knocked over.

The photo's great.

I've spent the whole afternoon in the library trying to find stuff I've written and posted on here to use in a portfolio for my first Creative Writing assignment (for which I then have to write a contextual reflection). I haven't a clue where to start with the CR.

Technique: screw eyes up and draw the words down. Hope it's ok.

Help!

Thank you for the pick!!!

Parson Thru

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

Can't help, but good luck and congratulations on another lovely pick!

 

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Thank you insert! X

Deferred that part of the task for now. Busy tweaking. This might form the basis of that collection you once suggested.

Parson Thru

Submitted by Di_Hard on

It's masterpiece example of free verse, line ends, space between stanzas. Even though all the information apart from last line and title, are about movement and stress, it ends with such a sense of peace and relief, I think because of the rhythm, and because of the space

 

Submitted by Parson Thru on

What a wonderful and informed comment, Di.

Thank you so much.

I really am bowled over by this. You just never know when you post these things.

Parson Thru

Submitted by fatboy74 on

A little beauty and the perfect pick. 

 

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Thanks FB!!!

Parson Thru