River in Spate
By Rhiannonw
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Downpour falling
river filling
spilling
tumbling
further onward, forward, downward
rumbling
rushing, crashing, splashing, pushing
urgent motion
moving, shoving
churning
fast returning
to the basin
of the ocean
vast
at last.
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Rivers can be so calm and
Rivers can be so calm and peaceful, yet also a torrent causing havoc, which you describe very well in this poem Rhiannon.
Jenny.
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this is so exciting! I loved
this is so exciting! I loved it - would never have thought of shoving, but it's perfect, giving the idea of eagerness. And I love the peace of the 2 wide, flat A sounds at the end - vast made me think of the sky and last the sea wrapping round the earth. It's sort of like a sigh. I keep reading it all over and over :0)
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Lovely, watery poem, I
Lovely, watery poem, I enjoyed the free flowing arrangement of the river's description. It's so alive and very much an apt theme, given all the bursting banks and frozen, flooded fields I observe on my drive to work.
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Nicely done. Always good to
Nicely done. Always good to see different formats working.
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