Conceptual

Cherry

By seashore

Mon, 21 Nov 2011
  • 6687 reads
26 comments
 

One final brushstroke
has undone me

reopening a landscape
of jagged scars

just when I thought
I was healed -

but it isn't over
it can never be over

so my perspective shifts

as I nurse
my bandaged hands

and plan a new direction,
another medium -

my sacrificial limbs perhaps,
preserved in formaldahide

far more mind-blowing
than Damien's sheep,

more disarming

than his Mother and Child
Divided -

surely I'm a dead cert
for the Turner prize...

Certificate 15
Poem
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by fatboy74 on
I love this stripped down writing and the format works perfectly for me - really good.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Fantastic poem, Coral, which made me smile;-) Tina

 

Submitted by shoe on
Fb has named it, stripped down, and it is just so good.

 

Submitted by seashore on
Really appreciate the feedback - thanks FB!

Submitted by seashore on
Glad it made you smile Tina..and thank you too.

Submitted by seashore on
Thanks for reading and commenting shoe - always good to have your feedback. Thanks also for the cherry eds!

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Don't know about the Turner prize, but it was a dead cert for the Cherry ... stripped naked but well endowed. I like! Chris ;)

Submitted by Dynamaso on
I'm not a big fan of Hirst's work although he does some very interesting things. That said, this is a sparse gem and I really enjoyed the read.

 

Submitted by seashore on
Loved your comment, Chris - many thanks!

Submitted by Geoffrey on
Nice one! Either you've changed your style or I'm getting stronger emotionally; but just a normal good read!

Submitted by seashore on
Dynasmo - thanks so much for reading and for the feedback. No I'm not a big Hirst fan either but because he's so controversial he does provide good subject material for writing!

Submitted by seashore on
Thanks Geoff - I like to experiment sometimes so I'm glad you thought it worked in this case. `Normal' eh? Oh dear, not sure about that though....

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi coral, you said you'd lost your poetry, but I don't think you have at all. I think this was spoken from the heart, your thoughts, feelings and frustrations stripped down, just like FB said. Thankyou for sharing this piece of art. Jenny.

 

Submitted by seashore on
Hi Jenny, actually you're right - the beginning of the poem was all about my hands/wrists playing up about a month into doing art again. I tried several times to write about it unsuccessfully then this came to me so in a way I turned the situation on its head (if you see what I mean). One thing I have learned though, is that I can't do both at the same time - I couldn't write at all when I was doing visual art and didn't really want to - and now my hands are a bit better I'm terrified of re-injuring them and also not being able to write. So that's the story! It really did take a while to get back into writing. How are you healthwise? Thought of you a lot. Thanks so much for dropping by and giving me your thoughts. Coral x

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi coral, I'm fine, though I do suffer with my breathing, it's the dreaded sinus problem, but I've had it all my life, so I live with it. Thankyou so much for asking and thinking about me. By the way, you're not the only one who is having writers block, I've written stuff, but I'm not sure if it's any good, so I'm weary of putting it on, it's not poetry, but stories...just don't know where to go for the ending, but I'm not going to worry about it, may be I'll just put one of them on and not worry about whether it's good or not, just put it on for fun. Sorry I'm rabbiting again. Anyway again thankyou for your thoughts. Jenny. P.S. I really do hope your wrists improve, I can understand it must be so frustrating for you. Take care.

 

Submitted by seashore on
Sorry about your sinus problems Jenny - debilitating I know. I also sympathize with the writing `block' -I'm sure it's more common than we think. I also understand how you feel not knowing if your work is good enough to post - I'm the same. People tell me not to worry about it and just post, that it's all about writing for fun, but when you know so many people are going to see it, it's a different matter. Try one and see what happens - there's always a `delete' button!! Take care, xx

Submitted by seashore on
Thank you so much SC - always good to have your comments.

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Simple but powerful seashore! Love it :-) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by seashore on
Thanks so much for that Magic xx

Submitted by Overthetop1 on
This is a really great poem. Works soo well. I don't think you need to know about art to appreciate it either. Very glad you got a cherry for this.

Overthetop1

Submitted by seashore on
Thanks OTT

Submitted by seashore on
Thank you jib - really appreciate your comments.

Submitted by MrBert on
The ending took me (pleasurably) by surprise. Smiles exchanged, then! Mr B

Mr B

Submitted by seashore on
Thank you Mr B!

Submitted by maggyvaneijk on
F*** Me, this is good. Sorry I can't say that in a more articulate way. Your poetry does that to me, it evokes raw emotion. Especially the beginning, it felt like you'd just taken a chunk of my brain and spread it across the screen. Please never stop writing, ever.

 

Submitted by seashore on
Maggy - probably the best comment I've had EVER. I can see you really `got' this so many many thanks.