Sounds

Cherry

By TJW

Sat, 11 Nov 2023
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12 comments
 

Squirrels and birds

everywhere

'possums and 'coons

here and there

Click of a magazine

slapped into a

pistol

Click of the bolt slid back

sounds nothing like a grunt

or

a

whistle

It's the definitive click

of one in the chamber

Locked and loaded

the last sound remembered 

Certificate 18
Non-fiction

Comments

Submitted by lenchenelf on

... and uncomfortable in its truth

best

Lxx

 

Submitted by celticman on

perhaps the reverberation of the shot, the last sound? Already too late. 

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

Sharp, as lenchen says, and loaded with sound

 

Submitted by marandina on

Evocative and kinda sinister. I'm rooting for the 'possums and 'coons

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

I don't know to me it sounds more like suicide.

Tom

 

 

Submitted by TJW on

Yeah, choose debilitating headaches or being drugged.  I can take a hint.  Find a home for your babies.  Then go home. 

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

TJ I hope you don't and I'm sure your your babies would be really unhappy without you. I'd try some different drugs first. Are they migraines?

 

Submitted by TJW on

They're caused by blast injuries.  That's all I know.  VA knows nothing more than I do.  I also know that I am fucking tired of this shit

 

Submitted by onemorething on

A very powerful poem, TJW and brilliantly written. These headaches sound terrible and headaches can be so debilitating. I can really imagine feeling sick of them. Am sending kind thoughts over to you and hoping perhaps you can have further investigation in the new year with the chance of different medications or treatments. Wishing you healing. 

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Adding my wishes to those of Claudine and Rachel

 

Submitted by TJW on

Ladies, 

Claudine, Rachel and DH (I don't know your name), I have been less than a gentleman, have let my pain overwhelm my manners.  I'm sorry.

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

Actually I wasn't thinking of modern pop music.