inspiration point - poem?

Poem of the week

By darkenwolf

Tue, 27 Jul 2010
  • 3141 reads
15 comments
 

Softly they fall,
gentle and silent
Petals of winter’s white rose,
Hard edges fade and blur

Trees shiver in frigid slumber
Quick-flick, warily she darts
Stop-start, stop-start
Eyes not seen but felt

Stop-start, stop-start
Fear falls with the black arrow
This way and that
Faster, faster

Heart hammering, legs pumping
Bloody demise descends
Talons outstretched… Then silence.
The dark stain of life’s harsh red rose.

Certificate U
Some call it Poetry
Miscellaneous

Comments

Submitted by tcook on
Excellent use of the IP - good stuff!

Submitted by Highhat on
A very good IP poem "trees shiver in frigid slumber. . " nice line ;)xx pia

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Congratulations on being Cherry Picked. Well deserved. Jenny.

 

Submitted by darkenwolf on
thanks for all your comments - very much appreciated. I decided that i'm going to do a poem, a short story and a novel idea based on the IP; can't promise that i'll post them all though. thanks again for the comments

Submitted by Highhat on
You do that. I think it is a good idea;) pia

Submitted by kheldar on
Really clever piece, a great take on the IP. A well deserved cherry. Kheldar :--)

cool

Submitted by Kahdai on
great ip!

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by darkenwolf on
ty :)

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Really love the rhythm in this one, darkenwolf! Especially the repetition of 'stop-start'. Well done on the cherry ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by darkenwolf on
high praise indeed Thank you very much :)

Submitted by Sally H on
great poem, and well deserved cherry! keep it up :) Sally H

Submitted by darkenwolf on
TY ;)

Submitted by Cavalcader on
New darkenwolf Yes,I too say great use of the (IP) Congrats: on being cherry! picked. julie x

Submitted by darkenwolf on
many thanks - glad that you enjoyed it ;)

Submitted by PipMic on
brilliant...just read it ... also like the line - "trees shiver in frigid slumber"